terça-feira, 16 de março de 2010


The Travel
One day my fathers diceded to travel to Bahia and we take the things and we travel by car along the cost of Brail to see the bealtifull things.
When we got there my father didn't remember to get the money to pay the hotel and we sleeped at the car...In the morning my father take the money at the bank and finely we find another hotel to stay.
We see many diferents things the culter,the turistic points like beaches and Pelourinho wich have a strong relation with the past off this place.
In the last day we do the boat tour...The omly thing was the camera had broken but this travel was unforgettable :D.

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  1. Hi Ricardo!!

    As I said in class the other day travel is the verb, whereas the noun is trip. So a more suitable title for your story would be: The Trip

    The rest of the corrections you should do, I'll be list below.

    my fathers = my parents
    diceded = decided
    we take the things = we took our stuff
    and we travel = and travelled
    Brail = Brazil
    the bealtifull things = many beautiful things
    to pay the hotel = to pay for the hotel
    we sleeped at the car = we slept in the car
    In the morning = In the following morning
    my father take = ... cashed
    finely = finally
    we find = we found
    see = saw
    diferents = different
    the culter?? I didn't get this one!
    points = attractions
    like beaches = like the beaches
    wich have a strong relation with = which is strongly related to
    In the last day = On the last day
    we do the boat tour = we wnet on a boat tour
    The omly thing was = There was only one bad thing:
    broken = broken.
    but this travel was unforgettable = This trip was unforgettable

    Best wishes, Janine

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